Will someone read my personal statement essay? the prompt is an experience that has changed who we are?
Tightly wound, closely connected, and in tune with the importance of life. This is my family. They are my life. Many teenagers feel as though
there is nothing important about them or they are "just like everyone else". I, however, know that there is something special about me. An unique trait that not many kids my age have. It started with a diagnosis and ended with a deep breath.
You see, my brother was diagnosised with Acute Myloid Leukemia, a rare blood cancer, when he was seventeen. With two years of fighting, we resulted in defeat. Although I was filled with emotions and quite frankly did not know what was going on, I came to the desicion that night that we
are put into the hands of our families only for a short while as "borrowed angels". With the help of my family and this very experience,
over the past five years I have noticed a drastic change in myself. No longer am I that girl who waste countless hours planning her "dream wedding" or the girl who flips through magazines twirling her hair trying to piece together that "perfect first date outfit". My priority in life is to be heard.
My newfound goal is to make a difference. My personal, one of a kind experience has made me realize that I want to change how the
world is today. I want to show everyone that no matter what, I am going to make this world a better place. Now that does not just mean recycling or
donating clothes and toys to people less fortunate. No no. I want to CHANGE how many children get sick and die each year. I want my story to be
heard. My story started with a diagnosis. However, the ending is a little different. I want to change that last breath to a CURE.
- Dnut
Not so impressive, can be more emotional and straight to teh point. You have used many 'My' and 'I' which are avoidable. Your brother and his dreams need a mention too. All the best.
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