Would you like this novel or the other better?

Would you like this novel or the other better?
ive edited my novel's overview so you can know more what is going on. it's a young adult's mystery novel and i'm still working on it (i'm turning 15 btw). here's the overview of the new:

Since Rachel Charlotte Brown was diagnosed of leukemia, things had gone absolutely wrong in the family; first, her mother left her without any reason, second, her father had entirely changed and lived in his new girlfriend's apartment instead. Her grandma that she never knew before moves in to her apartment but does nothing except for knitting and watching TV and taking Rachel to the hospital. Rachel's only escape was her best friend, Daniel Johnson and her distant cousin, Jessica Hammocks. Rachel thought it was her leukemia that caused her family's problems but finding a mysterious old book in her apartment's storeroom that belonged to her departed grandfather, she had to give a second thought on who was causing her family's problems…

OLD OVERVIEW:

Since Rachel Charlotte Brown was diagnosed of leukemia, things had gone absolutely wrong in the family; first, her mother left her without any reason, second, her father had entirely changed and lived in his new girlfriend's apartment instead. Her grandma that she never knew before moves in to her apartment but does nothing except for knitting and watching TV. Rachel's only escape was her best friend, Daniel Johnson and her distant cousin, Jessica Hammocks. Rachel thought it was her leukemia that caused her family's problems but she thought wrong because something that lies beneath her family's mask is soon to be discovered…

I need your opinion, would you like to read the novel? Do you find it captivating?What should I improve? Any suggestions? It's not sherlock holmes type of science stuff but it still has a little bit of science in it.

- Rachel Adams
I personally think this one is better it caught my attention more and it seems more mysetrious something i would read.

Since Rachel Charlotte Brown was diagnosed of leukemia, things had gone absolutely wrong in the family; first, her mother left her without any reason, second, her father had entirely changed and lived in his new girlfriend's apartment instead. Her grandma that she never knew before moves in to her apartment but does nothing except for knitting and watching TV. Rachel's only escape was her best friend, Daniel Johnson and her distant cousin, Jessica Hammocks. Rachel thought it was her leukemia that caused her family's problems but she thought wrong because something that lies beneath her family's mask is soon to be discovered…

- godsnarnialover
it makes me curious as to what's going to happen. :) I like the second one.

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